Post by Shiloh on Feb 26, 2010 13:48:43 GMT -5
I'm enrolled in a screenwriting class at university this semester. Our assignment is to write 30 pages of a feature film. Basically each page equals about 1 minute of film once shot.
Our beginning assignment is to write the first five pages, or the opener of the film. I pitched the idea of a feature length Buffy film based off the TV series to my professor. He said the idea was fine and to go forth and write it.
This is my opener so far, and I'd love to know what ya'll think of it
I like what I've written so far, but I'm not really sure where to go from here. Any ideas or suggestions would be greatly appreciated
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FADE IN
EXT. GRAVEYARD – NIGHT
Buffy is on patrol hunting for vampires.
BUFFY
29 years old and still hunting the undead, ugh my life officially sucks! At least I still have a life, considering I’ve died twice.
Suddenly, foot steps are heard approaching from behind.
BUFFY
Note to self, never say sucks while hunting for vamps. Crap, where did I put Mr. Pointy?
VAMPIRE
SLAYER! Prepare to meet your doom!
BUFFY
Really is that the best you can do? I patrol all night, and you have no witty puns for me—nothing? I have one for you…
The two of them begin fighting, Buffy does several fancy punches, back-flips, and high-kicks, ultimately staking the vampire and watching it turn to dust.
BUFFY
Well, that was the most fun you can have without having any fun.
INT. BUFFY’S HOUSE – SUNRISE
A young boy runs up to Buffy, he looks about 5 years old.
BRIAN
Mommy, you’re home!
BUFFY
Hi son, I missed you. Why are you still up?
BRIAN
Daddy said I could stay up with him.
BUFFY
Did he now?
A man approaches, carefully avoiding the rising sunlight beaming in from the window.
ANGEL
Sorry, but he wanted to stay up until I went to bed. You know I can’t say no to him.
BUFFY
And I can’t say no to you, we may have a problem here.
The two tenderly embrace and kiss.
BRIAN
GROSS!
BUFFY
I know right? A slayer in love with a vampire. What would they call that? Twilight—-not even!
EXT. LIBRARY – DAY
BUFFY’S friends XANDER and WILLOW are seen waiting outside the library.
XANDER
What do you think is keeping the Buffster? She said she would meet us here.
WILLOW
Maybe she and Angel got groiny with each other again?
XANDER
Speaking of that, how did you manage to fix Angel’s whole “If I experience one moment of true happiness by having sex with Buffy I’ll become a vicious murderer named Angelus” thing?
WILLOW
Boy, can you cram complex issues into a nutshell or what?
XANDER
That’s me, nutshell guy
WILLOW
Anywhoo, I told you before. I figured out a spell and basically abra-ca-dabra’d his curse away.
XANDER
O K. That works, I guess. But fill me in on this other issue. You turned all the potential slayers into slayers, and in the process you became a goddess? So are you a witch or a god?
WILLOW
It would sure help if you’d keep up Xander. I’m both, a godwitch. Not to be confused with the ever popular sandwich.
BUFFY is running across the street towards them.
BUFFY
Sorry guys, I overslept. Happens a lot with me, out patrolling ‘till the wee hours of the morning—-you know the drill.
The three of them walk inside and find an empty study room and close the door.
INT. LIBRARY – DAY
BUFFY
I wanted to meet you because we have a slight problem. I can’t reach any of the slayers, not even the team captains. We have slayer stations set up all over the world. Something’s going on, something bad. Will, I need your help. Can you find a spell or something, anything? Xander, I need you to do a breakdown of all the slayers we’ve heard from in the past month. Tell me where they were, what they were doing, anything you can find.
XANDER
I’ll do what I can Buff, but how are you going to keep this up? The evil has subsided in recent years because of the slayers all over the globe. If The First finds out about this...
BUFFY
Exactly. And I’m not convinced it’s not The First behind this. Remember it got Angel to nearly kill himself, tricked Spike, all of us really, and killed off hundreds of potential slayers.
WILLOW
So, you think because The First failed once, it’s trying again—maybe this time killing off slayers?
BUFFY
Maybe. I’m not sure.
XANDER
But Buff, The First is incorporeal remember? It can’t touch anything. It just takes the form of those who have died and taunts you in that nah-nah-nah-nah way.
BUFFY
It was incorporeal. But we haven’t seen it in years. We don’t know what it’s capable of now.
Suddenly a loud explosion is felt throughout the library.
BUFFY
LOOKOUT!
Fire and debris are hurled through the air, headed straight for them. WILLOW’S eyes darken and she raises her hand.
WILLOW
SHIELD US!
The gang is surrounded by a protective barrier and they are unharmed by the explosion. BUFFY watches in horror as innocent lives are killed from the explosion in an instant. WILLOW teleports them all outside to safety.
EXT. STREET – DAY
BUFFY
Oh my god, no!
(she tries to run back inside)
WILLOW
BUFFY! You can’t, the building’s collapsing!
A dark mystical cloud appears revealing THE FIRST EVIL standing before them in the form of WILLOW’S dead girlfriend TARA.
THE FIRST EVIL/TARA
What was that you said about me? Oh yeah, what am I capable of? Well for starters how about this!
One-by-one THE FIRST brings forth every “big bad” Buffy has ever faced. THE MASTER, ANGELUS, THE MAYOR, ADAM, GLORY, and WICKED WILLOW surround them.
BUFFY
What the hell?
THE FIRST EVIL/TARA
Never ask me what I can do, because I’ll show you. And Willow, you got over me by getting under Kennedy? I’m much prettier than that bitch! Have fun slayer. Hope you survive, and if not—have a nice death!
BUFFY
Willow, get us out of here now!
WILLOW
Where to?
BUFFY begins communicating with WILLOW telepathically so “the big bads” don’t hear her plan.
BUFFY
Anywhere, just hurry! Maybe England to talk with Giles.
WILLOW teleports the three of them to England where they find GILES—Buffy’s Watcher.
Our beginning assignment is to write the first five pages, or the opener of the film. I pitched the idea of a feature length Buffy film based off the TV series to my professor. He said the idea was fine and to go forth and write it.
This is my opener so far, and I'd love to know what ya'll think of it
I like what I've written so far, but I'm not really sure where to go from here. Any ideas or suggestions would be greatly appreciated __________________________________________
FADE IN
EXT. GRAVEYARD – NIGHT
Buffy is on patrol hunting for vampires.
BUFFY
29 years old and still hunting the undead, ugh my life officially sucks! At least I still have a life, considering I’ve died twice.
Suddenly, foot steps are heard approaching from behind.
BUFFY
Note to self, never say sucks while hunting for vamps. Crap, where did I put Mr. Pointy?
VAMPIRE
SLAYER! Prepare to meet your doom!
BUFFY
Really is that the best you can do? I patrol all night, and you have no witty puns for me—nothing? I have one for you…
The two of them begin fighting, Buffy does several fancy punches, back-flips, and high-kicks, ultimately staking the vampire and watching it turn to dust.
BUFFY
Well, that was the most fun you can have without having any fun.
INT. BUFFY’S HOUSE – SUNRISE
A young boy runs up to Buffy, he looks about 5 years old.
BRIAN
Mommy, you’re home!
BUFFY
Hi son, I missed you. Why are you still up?
BRIAN
Daddy said I could stay up with him.
BUFFY
Did he now?
A man approaches, carefully avoiding the rising sunlight beaming in from the window.
ANGEL
Sorry, but he wanted to stay up until I went to bed. You know I can’t say no to him.
BUFFY
And I can’t say no to you, we may have a problem here.
The two tenderly embrace and kiss.
BRIAN
GROSS!
BUFFY
I know right? A slayer in love with a vampire. What would they call that? Twilight—-not even!
EXT. LIBRARY – DAY
BUFFY’S friends XANDER and WILLOW are seen waiting outside the library.
XANDER
What do you think is keeping the Buffster? She said she would meet us here.
WILLOW
Maybe she and Angel got groiny with each other again?
XANDER
Speaking of that, how did you manage to fix Angel’s whole “If I experience one moment of true happiness by having sex with Buffy I’ll become a vicious murderer named Angelus” thing?
WILLOW
Boy, can you cram complex issues into a nutshell or what?
XANDER
That’s me, nutshell guy
WILLOW
Anywhoo, I told you before. I figured out a spell and basically abra-ca-dabra’d his curse away.
XANDER
O K. That works, I guess. But fill me in on this other issue. You turned all the potential slayers into slayers, and in the process you became a goddess? So are you a witch or a god?
WILLOW
It would sure help if you’d keep up Xander. I’m both, a godwitch. Not to be confused with the ever popular sandwich.
BUFFY is running across the street towards them.
BUFFY
Sorry guys, I overslept. Happens a lot with me, out patrolling ‘till the wee hours of the morning—-you know the drill.
The three of them walk inside and find an empty study room and close the door.
INT. LIBRARY – DAY
BUFFY
I wanted to meet you because we have a slight problem. I can’t reach any of the slayers, not even the team captains. We have slayer stations set up all over the world. Something’s going on, something bad. Will, I need your help. Can you find a spell or something, anything? Xander, I need you to do a breakdown of all the slayers we’ve heard from in the past month. Tell me where they were, what they were doing, anything you can find.
XANDER
I’ll do what I can Buff, but how are you going to keep this up? The evil has subsided in recent years because of the slayers all over the globe. If The First finds out about this...
BUFFY
Exactly. And I’m not convinced it’s not The First behind this. Remember it got Angel to nearly kill himself, tricked Spike, all of us really, and killed off hundreds of potential slayers.
WILLOW
So, you think because The First failed once, it’s trying again—maybe this time killing off slayers?
BUFFY
Maybe. I’m not sure.
XANDER
But Buff, The First is incorporeal remember? It can’t touch anything. It just takes the form of those who have died and taunts you in that nah-nah-nah-nah way.
BUFFY
It was incorporeal. But we haven’t seen it in years. We don’t know what it’s capable of now.
Suddenly a loud explosion is felt throughout the library.
BUFFY
LOOKOUT!
Fire and debris are hurled through the air, headed straight for them. WILLOW’S eyes darken and she raises her hand.
WILLOW
SHIELD US!
The gang is surrounded by a protective barrier and they are unharmed by the explosion. BUFFY watches in horror as innocent lives are killed from the explosion in an instant. WILLOW teleports them all outside to safety.
EXT. STREET – DAY
BUFFY
Oh my god, no!
(she tries to run back inside)
WILLOW
BUFFY! You can’t, the building’s collapsing!
A dark mystical cloud appears revealing THE FIRST EVIL standing before them in the form of WILLOW’S dead girlfriend TARA.
THE FIRST EVIL/TARA
What was that you said about me? Oh yeah, what am I capable of? Well for starters how about this!
One-by-one THE FIRST brings forth every “big bad” Buffy has ever faced. THE MASTER, ANGELUS, THE MAYOR, ADAM, GLORY, and WICKED WILLOW surround them.
BUFFY
What the hell?
THE FIRST EVIL/TARA
Never ask me what I can do, because I’ll show you. And Willow, you got over me by getting under Kennedy? I’m much prettier than that bitch! Have fun slayer. Hope you survive, and if not—have a nice death!
BUFFY
Willow, get us out of here now!
WILLOW
Where to?
BUFFY begins communicating with WILLOW telepathically so “the big bads” don’t hear her plan.
BUFFY
Anywhere, just hurry! Maybe England to talk with Giles.
WILLOW teleports the three of them to England where they find GILES—Buffy’s Watcher.
